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| Author: | nofatties [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:37 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
In class today our professor asked us to write a poem about the environment. Not my favourite topic since there's far too much babble babble babble rabble about the environment nowadays. However, the professor asked us to write the poem since April is supposedly Earth month here in the USA and the professor wanted the class to produce something relatively decent. So here's my first attempt at writing poetry, the first few verses. I decided on mixing environmental themes with Norse Mythology since me singing about saving trees is like finding Hillary Clinton having an affair with John McCain, it wont happen, and its just plain wrong.
Any comments/criticisms are greatly appreciated! Future Apologies go out to Asatru believers in this forum! And I hope this is the right place for the thread (Admins and Mods, please move if necessary)
Start poem: Three stacked Tiwaz Runes. Many years ago nine worlds were created, Connected by Yggdrasl, the World Tree, In Asgards mighty walls and battlegrounds In Jotunheim’s winter lands and blizzards, In Muspelheim’s fire and destruction, In Hel’s unknown dungeons, In Niðavellir’s gold encrusted mines, In Svartálfaheimr’s deep dampness, In Vanaheimr’s rich lands, In à|
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| Author: | Bjossi [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:58 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
I have no poetry sense whatsoever, but I like your use of Norse mythology. Also, it gives the poem a pretty interesting "texture" when you blend the original terminology with English. I guess I got a soft spot for that stuff because I'm fortunate enough to understand the very language it is based on. |
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| Author: | Captain Xavious [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 6:15 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
Wow, for my complete lack in knowledge about poetry in general, I gotta say I like it.
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| Author: | nofatties [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 6:23 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
Thanks guys!! I really appreciate your comments!! I'll be posting further updates soon!
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| Author: | Glosmostinex [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 6:41 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
you should create a band
I liked it! I'm not a poet, but I like it! I find it very nice to use Norse mythology too. it's a change from what we hear today. |
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| Author: | Industry [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 7:16 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
nice! better then the Poetry i can ever make. (If any) |
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| Author: | SX [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 7:51 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
Seeing as I'm the major poet here, I shall critique! And my judgment is: passable. I like the Norse mythology going on and the rhythm is very good for a first try. And environment poem can be used as a Nature poem. |
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| Author: | nofatties [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 7:57 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
Thanks guys!! Hey, SX, since you're the poet, do you have any advice on improving the poem? Anything else would be great!!
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| Author: | SX [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 8:24 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
Try not to make it too long, as the stanzas roll on and on, people will lose interest. And try to get feedback if you can, poets aren't great based on their first go. |
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| Author: | nofatties [ Mon Apr 27, 2009 9:58 pm ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
SX wrote: Try not to make it too long, as the stanzas roll on and on, people will lose interest. And try to get feedback if you can, poets aren't great based on their first go.
Thanks a load! I'm shortening the stanza's right now I should be able to post an update in a couple of hours
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| Author: | BlackEagle [ Tue Apr 28, 2009 5:42 am ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
I'm impressed at your knowledge of Norse mythology..
Poem's pretty good too.. I would probably never do poetry unless i was trying to impress someone....
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| Author: | nofatties [ Tue Apr 28, 2009 8:44 am ] |
| Post subject: | So I started my first attempt at writing poetry. |
Thanks BE, I appreciate it!
I gotta keep improving though
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