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Author:  Grizzlykiller [ Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:14 pm ]
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My name is Paul Carter, 6 years ago i learned something that Changed my life, i learned that i cant die, i also learned that the bible held the answer to the greatest discovery of mankind.

But not clouds have a silver lining.
Not all people are supposed to Die,
and not all people are supposed to do what i did.

Our story began when i was born.
i actually was pronounced dead.
and i WAS dead.
but the funny thing about genes is that they came to life, i Woke up a day later in a morgue.
I was a miracle in the eyes of some but i guess that was good luck.
My parents raised me to believe that i was special, that i had a dormant illness that would one day kill me, even though i knew i had conquered death once already.
8 years on i found out i had an illness which i had 1/10 the chance of surviving.
the doctors were amazed that i survived

by the time i was 18 i had to go onto a pill even though i didnt know what it did, i took it, a day later i woke up in a morgue again.
this time a man walked in and saw me, he ran faser than anyone i ever saw he left the morgue door open i walked out before i left te building i saw myslef in he mirror i had blood down m jacket and trousers my skin was almost pure white.
and my eyes were bloodshot red i couldnt feel my own body suddenly i thought, am i really dead.

i walked out and saw a man he had a gun i said "help me!" He immediatly shot me i fell to the ground before i could look at my wounds they were gone.

i stood up and stared at him he stared back in pure fear as i chared fro him someone stuck a needle into my neck i fell unconscious
to my amazement i didnt wake up in a morgue i woke up in a sealed room. i shouted "HELP" i heard a response "you're dead" I said back "I am"
he said back"do you want to know the truth. I said What truth He replied "the reason you cant die" I just said WHY He said "there's a reason for all of the worlds secrets. we hold the greatest one of all. and its all centred around you. YOU CANT DIE!. nothing can kill you EVER!.
your body is a simple anomaly that is genetic in everyday. you see every 2000 years people breed to a certain point where little genes called alphas are formed. Other 2000 years they are slowly combined until eventually its just chance that brings them together.
your mother and father where that chance when you were born we told them the same thing were telling you now. not only cant you die your genetics give you a almost instant metabalism any wound you sustain is healed instantly, you have other strengths aswell, you have 100% brain functunality normal humans have 5%, which means you can literally pick objects the size of trucks up with your mind, you can even control gravity if you focus on it. now the biggest secret of all, the last alpha human was a man named Jesus christ the bible predicted a second coming.you ARE the second coming. we are the only people that knows this secret. now the last thing is that the bible also tells of
Two people named adam and eve who started the alphas they were kicked out, for making gods creation UNPURE. at the time of the human races birth the alpha strain was a virus that if consumed started a chain of genes that killed the person and there future offspring they changed that gene to keep them alive and give them superhuman powers".

PART 2 coming soon Tell me what you think

part 2 features more truth,
and the person behind the alpha strain.
Author:  raziel [ Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:41 pm ]
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grizzlykiller wrote:
8 years on i found out i had an illness which i had 1/10 the chance of surviving.
the doctors were amazed that i survived

Sorry, just one thing, you might want to drop the survival rate of that...

When someone goes into cardiac arrest their chances of survival is about 3%, the use of a defibrillator raises it to 5%... so 1 in 20...

If his metabolism was that high then poisons and such would be broken down so quickly that the needle to the neck would do nothing.

I would also recommend that you don't include religion in your stories,at least not real ones.

Mal

P.S Grizzle, I don't mean to be harsh, but please copy it into word or something and do a spell check before uploading it, people will be more willing to read your stories if they are grammatically correct.
Author:  Sgt. Kelly [ Wed Nov 17, 2010 5:43 pm ]
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So what happens if you get launched into the sun or ripped apart by a BFG blast?
Author:  Grizzlykiller [ Thu Nov 18, 2010 11:02 am ]
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Tissue growth is microcellular, and his muscles are nearly as strong as bone

meaning a bfg blast would decapitate him but he would grow the arm or leg back in seconds

i have a problem with making storys sometimes i will try and i will lose interest so im writing them on my computer and im going to pos them up here from now on.
Author:  raziel [ Thu Nov 18, 2010 4:59 pm ]
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grizzlykiller wrote:
Tissue growth is microcellular, and his muscles are nearly as strong as bone

Then... the injection... how...?

grizzlykiller wrote:
i have a problem with making storys sometimes i will try and i will lose interest so im writing them on my computer and im going to pos them up here from now on.

Why not get a DA or FA account? There you would get more precise feedback and encouragement to carry on...

Mal

P.S If you decapitated him, would his head grow a body or would his body grow a head? The genes everywhere in the body have the DNA instructions to grow any part of the body so technically (assuming his body/head wouldn't run out of energy) then both...
Author:  Beta_krogoth [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 2:56 pm ]
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Heard that kinda plot before, its boring to me, and surely his regeneration (as stated by mal) would depend on the amount of energy/matter in his body. And 1/10 chance is a very good chance for most seriously dangerous illness's.

Sorry man, story didn't grab me at all :/
Author:  Grizzlykiller [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:04 pm ]
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im a beginner ;D

don expect me to make shake sphere books just yet ;D

PART 2

3 YEARS after finding out what i truly am, i turned into a hunter finding those who had connections with the alpha strain I had already learnt that i was a genetic anomaly and that i couldnt die But i learned something 7 month ago i talked to a man that believes he has a cure for the alpha strain but of course it has already consumed me to take the cure would supposably kill me but if 3 .50 cals and a rocket cant kill me then this wouldnt, i dont have a purpose in life, i am a freak of nature, and i am the alpha.

The title of the movie is ALPHA

There was a time in my life when i found a cure, but a cure dosnt kill you, this was a suicide pill, a way out but i didnt want to die knowing that questions were left unanswered ad i was ready to do the unthinkable and kill myself, well until i met a man he didnt have a name but he had answers, he told me tha the bible had more than he eyes could see and held the answer to the alpha strain he told me about revelation 21:6 the answer to the alpha strain, I am Alpha And Omega The beginning and The end i will give unto him that is athirst of the water of life freely "You are Alpha, the only thing that can kill you is the Omega, You are the beginning and he is the end, the omega is a strain created alog side the alpha strain that died a long time after the alpha strain. THE ONLY THING THAT CAN KILL YOU IS THE OMEGA STRAIN but you can kill the omega strain aswell. Before i left i asked one question "who are you i said "i sit at the right hand side of god" he said
WHen i found out that the only thing that could kill me is already dead, i imagined a life of pain and destruction, i finally realised i want to die
I searched for the Omega srain for two years and found nothing was i doomed to a horrible life.

Find Out in PART 3!
The final battle between the Alpha and Omega Strain
Author:  Beta_krogoth [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:17 pm ]
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Shakespear didn't do any books, he did plays mate XD

Spear.
Author:  Sgt. Kelly [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:20 pm ]
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Shakespeare, Krogoth. ;)


So what happens if you get your brain blasted away with a fully charged railgun shot, Grizzly? Even if you could regenerate, you just lost all your memories and motor skills.

Also, what if someone simply put a metal plate on top of your neck-stump? How would your head regenerate in time to keep your entire body from dying due to lack of oxygen?
Author:  Beta_krogoth [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:26 pm ]
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Mah bad, spellings never been my strong point ;P
Author:  Grizzlykiller [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:34 pm ]
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He is half human and half virus his memories are regenarated aswell if he gets incenirated the Strain Reconsructs his body from his surounings by turning them into nutrients ;D

PART 2 OUT NOW!
Author:  Beta_krogoth [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:35 pm ]
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Half virus? how could he be half virus? thats no sense at all! how on earth how him being half virus allow him to regenerate his memorys and motor skills? virus's don't have either!
Author:  DarkCarnivour [ Fri Nov 19, 2010 3:54 pm ]
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Your story is way to short to have that many fancy concepts and truths crammed in it. A cup of coffee that's all sugar...
Author:  Black Eagle [ Sat Nov 20, 2010 10:27 am ]
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You do seem to be rushing into too many details, at this rate the story will be finished in the first few pages and the rest crammed with filla, nobody likes filla.... ;)
Author:  hide_in_light [ Sat Nov 20, 2010 1:36 pm ]
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Save the cheerleader, save the world!
Author:  Industry [ Sat Nov 20, 2010 4:16 pm ]
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Beta_krogoth wrote:
Half virus? how could he be half virus? thats no sense at all! how on earth how him being half virus allow him to regenerate his memorys and motor skills? virus's don't have either!


And aren't Viruses typically smaller then bacteria?
Author:  Beta_krogoth [ Sat Nov 20, 2010 9:43 pm ]
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Yeah, much smaller. They're just protein or something i think, can't exactly remember though, biology was a loooooooong time ago for me XD
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